The Unit Draft feedback

During our lesson we had other groups come and watch our 1st draft for our short film called "The Unit" We were then given feedback on this for things that we should work on to improve the extract.

We had many positive comments toward our draft but also we did have to take into account the points that were not so good about our draft. For example one of our EBI's was that the silhouettes did not look like it fitted into the sequence, as a group we discussed this and decided to change our sequence order around so the silhouettes when introduced would make sense and looks correct in their placing

Another point we had was that some of our shots lasted a little bit too long, as a group we agreed that some shots were longer than others and so when rearing our sequence we spoke again about how long we want each specific shot to be so that it would be long enough for the audience to see but not so it drags on for quite a while.

A third major point was that they could not follow the story very well, however we were doing a title sequence so there isn't really a fixed plot/story to follow as we are using different object and actor shots to display our titles.

Overall there were some many positive comments that our group were very happy with but also some very good points that we have to deal with to make our draft better.

1st Draft The unit

Improved Animatic

         
With the help from our peer review feedback, our group made a second version of our animatic and made improvements to it, one of our points was changing the length of different shots and making them shorter as some shots last for a long time so we decided on different shorter lengths for the shots.

Another thing that we had to do was add more title sequences to fit the names of the crew of our extract to make it fit with the necessary names, (resizing, font ,style)

Finally we decided to add music in the beginning to help immediately build suspense after our groups intro, we did this so the audience immediately can guess what genre our extract is. This helps identify our genre as does our shots but this helps the animatic just build a bit more early suspense.

Creating title Images

As a group we decided on making a title sequence, due to this we thought that silhouettes would be a really interesting effect for our titles to appear on as we introduce our different characters, and to also keep mystery about our different characters due to it being a thriller.

 To create the silhouettes we had to film the different actions of our characters doing different things so we had a large selection of different silhouettes to choose from. We then created a grey-scale background in Photoshop, we then exported them into the composition and placed them on a lower layer so they would not overlap with the shots.

We have chosen silhouettes to almost create a James Bond type feel as we are using police detectives and a murder investigation for our extract and so it would fit very well.